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Band 4

Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Education
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 and health are the most important for citizens so they can be funded by the
goverment
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government
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percent
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per cent
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 if
its
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it's
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 possible, if
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not
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 have possibility can be funded
at
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by at
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 least 40-50
percent
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per cent
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.Regarding
education
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the
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apply
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base
education
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 should be free because every citizen must obtain
secondary
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a secondary
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 school
education
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. Because nation development should be ranked on it. Bachelor Master and Doctoral
education
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 can
bpurchased
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be purchased
purchased
 by
citizen
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citizens
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 who want to improve their career.

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task achievement
Ensure that your argument is clear and takes a definitive stance. This will help guide your essay and improve your overall response.
coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the structure of your paragraphs. A clear introduction, body, and conclusion will enhance coherence.
task achievement
Use specific examples to strengthen your points. This will make your arguments more persuasive and relevant.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar errors to improve clarity, especially with key terms like 'government' and 'purchased'.
content
You recognize the importance of education and healthcare in society, showing a clear understanding of their roles.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equity
  • social justice
  • economic benefits
  • productive workforce
  • quality of life
  • social mobility
  • personal responsibility
  • overuse
  • inefficiencies
  • feasibility
  • implementation challenges
  • sustainable funding
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