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The pie chart below shows the percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India from 2012 to 2017.

The pie chart below shows the percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India from 2012 to 2017.
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This
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 two pie charts illustrate the proportion of
advertisings
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advertising
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 spending
in
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on
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 sex
different
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in different
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 types of
media
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 in 2012 and 2017 in India.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that television
advertisement
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advertisements
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 had the highest
viewers
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number of viewers
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,
while
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 advertising
on
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in
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 cinema had a few watchers in both years. In 2012, percentages of radio and outdoor advertisements were
betwen
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between
 7,0 and 5,0 in India.
However
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,
the
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apply
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digital
media
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 had a slight increase
by
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of
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 1%,
in other words
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, it reached
to
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apply
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6% in
a
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apply
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total.
Moreover
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, a common advertising was by
a
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apply
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print
media
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 , the percentage of seeing
this
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 kind of
media
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was
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38% of the public average. In 2017, there
were
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was
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a slightly
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slightly increased
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 in advertisements that
showed
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were shown
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 on television
screen
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screens
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, it reached around 45%
instead
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 of 34% in 2012.
Also
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, the number of people who
watched
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watch
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 digital
media
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 advertising
about
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is about
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 15%. But, radio and outdoor activities spent 0,4% and 5,0%. As we can see that a tiny raisin
of
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in
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 the proportion
on
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of
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tv
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TV
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 advertising from 43% in 2012 and 45 after five years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words media with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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