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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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 about
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 of
fairtrade-labelled
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coffee
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 and
bananas
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 from 1999 to 2004 in
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UK
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the UK
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,
Switzerland
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Denmark
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Belgium
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Sweden
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. In
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 of Euros In 1999, the
coffee
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sales
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 in the
UK
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 was 1.5
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millions
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Switzerland
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 was 3
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millions
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million
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Denmark
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 was 1.8
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million
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 was 1
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millions
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 was only 0.8
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Millions
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. 5 years later, there was a lot of difference in the
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. these 5 different countries
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increased
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UK
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sales
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was
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 20
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millions
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 almost 12 times increased.
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Switzerland
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Switzerland's
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sales
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was
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millions
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 2 times bigger than 5 years before.
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denmark
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 was 2
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millions
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million
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Belgium
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millions
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million
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Sweden
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 was 1
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millions
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million
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. The
bananas
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sales
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 in 1999 in
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switzerland
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was
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 15
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millions
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,
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UK
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 was 1
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millions
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million
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Belgium
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 0.6
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millions
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 1.8
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millions
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million
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Denmark
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millions
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million
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sales
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Switzerland
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 had a rapid increase to 47
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millions
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million
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,
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UK
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 had increased 4.5
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millions
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million
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sales
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,
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belgium
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rised
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 to 4
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millions
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, the other 2 county which are
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Denmark
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they
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experiencing
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decreased
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of
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sales
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 from 1.8 to 1
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millions
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Denmark
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 from 2 to 0.9
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millions
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. In conclusion, in 2004 the highest
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in
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coffee
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 and
Bananas
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was
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UK
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 and
Switzerland
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. And the lowest
sales
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in
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coffee
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 and
bananas
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was
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Sweden
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in Sweden
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Denmark
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, denmark, belgium, sweden, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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