The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentage of New
Zealand
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Zealand's
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population from 2011 and 2012 by age group. It is clear from the graph that the middle
ages
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were
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increased in 2011,
however
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, the years from 40 to 64 were the
higest
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highest
in proportion.
Also
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, people above 65 were the least in number.
According to
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what is shown,
ages
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under 15 and from 15 to 39 years old went down
for
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about 0.2 percent, from 898 to 896 million and from 1.577 to 1.574 million respectively.
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However
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the majority
people
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of people
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who are from 40 to 64 climbed gradually
for
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around 0.6 per cent, from1.331 to 1.33 million respectively.
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contrast
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contrast,
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people
from
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apply
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above 65 years old were
minor
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a minor
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figure among all
ages
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, which decreased
dramaticlly
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dramatically
by about 4.0%.
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, we could say that teenagers and middle
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dropped down,
whereas
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the old
ages
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went up sharply. New Zealand should put a plan for their citizen to grow their population.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age group
  • increase
  • decline
  • elderly population
  • aging population
  • working-age population
  • stable labor force
  • modest increase
  • significant change
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