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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar charts provide key information about the proportion of females and males aged between
60-and
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60 and
 64 years between 1970 and 2000 in four countries Australia,
Japan
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, and the
USA
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,
as well as
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Belgium
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. The units are measured in
percentage
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Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there has been an increase in the
percentage
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 of
men
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.
In addition
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,
men
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 increased over in the United States and
Japan
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,
whereas
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 the
percentage
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 of women decreased.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1970 the number of
men
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 in
Japan
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 increased to 84% more than
USA
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 73%.
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In
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 2000 the
percentage
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 of
men
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 had decreased significantly to 19% in
Belgium
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. In terms of the
percentage
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 of women in 1970 was rising in
Japan
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 and the
USA
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 between 43% and 36%
while
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, in Australia and
Belgium
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 was
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 to 18% and 8%. In 2000 the number of females decreased in
Japan
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 and
Belgium
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 to 40% and 7%
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 it rose in Australia and
USA
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, usa, belgium, percentage, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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