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Band 4.5

Question: You are facing difficulties with your current room allotment. Write a formal letter to the hostel warden explaining your concerns. In your letter: Describe the issues you are experiencing with your roommate. Explain how these issues are affecting you. Request a possible solution to the problem.

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Respected sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
about
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 my
room
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 allotment. I am sharing a
room
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 with
physical
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a physical
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 education department student and find it really challenging to accommodate
with
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him. Since
, he
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then, he
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 has been in a lot of sports activities and performing practices in the
room
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. It was annoying and difficult for me to concentrate on
studies
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my studies
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.
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, he is inviting his friends and they are staying in the same
room
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. Sometimes, they take my snacks without my permission because of
this
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 my academic works are interrupted. I kindly request you
that
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arranging
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arrange
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 a single
room
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 could solve my issues. I am willing to pay the extra cost
for
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 a new
room
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. Please look into
this
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 matter and provide a solution as soon as possible. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Santhoshkumar

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down some of your ideas into separate paragraphs to improve clarity in your writing.
task achievement
Make sure to use proper sentence structure and phrasing to enhance your formal tone.
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You maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for this context.
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Your request for a single room is clearly stated, ensuring that the purpose of your letter is understood.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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