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The charts below illustrates which of three food restaurants were the most preferred amongest teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 and prediction in 2027. Summarize the key information and make comparison where relavent.

The charts below illustrates which of three food restaurants were the most preferred amongest teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 and prediction in 2027. Summarize the key information and make comparison where relavent.
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The pie charts compare which three fast food restaurants were the most preferred among
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adolescents
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 in
Vietnam
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 and
Indonesia
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 in 2017 and prediction for 2027.
Overall
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McDonald
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is
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 the most favourite restaurant in
Indonesia
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 in 2017 and
predicted
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 to be the same in 2027. The most popular restaurant in
Vietnam
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 was
Burger
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 King in 2017, and in 2027,
McDonald
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's is expected to the the most liked by
teenagers
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. The popularity of
KFC
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 is more popular in
Indonesia
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 than in
Vietnam
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 in both 2017 and 2027. In
Vietnam
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, in 2017, 52.8% of
teenagers
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 preferred
Burger
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 King
while
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 in 2027, 57.4% of
Vietnamese
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adolescents
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 will prefer
McDonald
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's. In terms of
Burger
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 King, in 2017, 52.8% of
Vietnamese
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adolescents
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 preferred it. In 2027, 39% of
Vietnamese
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teenagers
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 will prefer
Burger
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 King.
Moreover
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,
KFC
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 was
least
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 favourite among
the
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Vietnamese
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adolescents
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. In 2017,
KFC
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favourite
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to
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 only 4.1% of
Vietnamese
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teenagers
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. In 2027, the popularity is expected to be slightly increased and 6.3% of
teenagers
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 in
Vietnam
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 will prefer
KFC
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. In
Indonesia
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, 60.8% of
teenagers
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 preferred
McDonald
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's and in 2027, the popularity is expected to
be declined
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 and 48.5% of Indonesian
adolescents
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 preferred
McDonald
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's. In 2017, 23.8% of
teenagers
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 preferred
KFC
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 and in 2027, 39.2% of
adolescents
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 will prefer
KFC
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. Only 15.4% of Indonesian
teenagers
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 preferred
Burger
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 King in 2017, and in 2027, 12.3% of Indonesian
Teenagers
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 will prefer
Burger
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 King.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adolescents, vietnam, indonesia, mcdonald, burger, teenagers, kfc, vietnamese with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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