Some people think that the main benefit of international cooperation is in the protection of the environment, while others believe that businesses mainly benefit. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by some people that protecting
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the
environment
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is primarily possible thanks to overseas cooperation.
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, others consider that conserving the
environment
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fairly based on companies. Personally, I think that
countries
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international
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internationally
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connected
other
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to other
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continents
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as North
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and
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South
America
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give more significant and preserve their
environment
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. In
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essay, I will discuss both views and provide an opinion as well in the end. On the one hand, a wide variety of businesses play
important
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role
to safeguard
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in safeguarding
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their ecosystem. First of all, they take into account
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the
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endangered types of
plant
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plants
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and some species of animals.
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, companies can start donation
campaignes
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campaigns
campaign
to preserve particularly animals and plants
such
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as
panda
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pandas
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,
penguin
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penguins
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and polar
bear
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bears
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.
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, some businesses man already
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opened national parks
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as the
nation park
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National Park
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in Turkey to preserve
sort
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some
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of these animals which is crucial.
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, it is obviously needed international cooperation to secure our habitat. Rich
countries
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can help other poor nations as if
enviroment
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environment
environmental
issue
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issues
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. It
is
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not only
cover
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covers
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living creatures but
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preserve
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preserves
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alarming problems
such
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as global warming and pollution.
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, weak
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totally couldn’t deal with
enviroment
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environmental
environment
problems because of
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a shortage
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of money or
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a knowledgable
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knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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population or public person.
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,
countries
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which being wealthy contribute to their economies and give a lot of information about how to solve concerns.
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,
USA
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the USA
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in North
America
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free
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helped
to
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Brazilia in
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South
America
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about
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increased sea
level
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levels
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and dried some lands caused because of global warming. So, they sent some scientists and provided some budget to give solutions to Brezilia
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year. In conclusion,
although
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componies
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companies
mainly promote benefits,
this
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is not possible to protect the
environment
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without international
partnership
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partnerships
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. I strongly believe that most
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countries
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can help
eachother
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each other
with
coorperation
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cooperation
when it comes to issues related to
enviroment
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environmental
environment
concerns.

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task achievement
Clarify your stance more clearly in the introduction. Ensure that it is evident which side you lean towards.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphing to separate different ideas more distinctly. This will enhance readability and understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of vocabulary and improve on grammar and spelling to enhance your essay's quality.
task achievement
You provided valid points for both sides of the argument, showing a balanced view.
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You included examples, which help to support your points.
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