The line graph gives the details of changing modules of local access to contemporary technology in the UK between the years of 1996 to 2003.

The line graph gives the details of changing modules of local access to contemporary technology in the UK between the years of 1996 to 2003.
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The graph illustrates the
persentage
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percentage
of the public who have access to contemporary technology in the United Kingdom from 1996 to 2003.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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CD
player
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players
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was
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were
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the most used tech items throughout the period. Meanwhile,
internet
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the internet
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was the least used technology at that time.
According to
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what is shown, home
computer
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computers
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was rising
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gradually reached
at
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nearly 60% in 2003.
While
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mobile
phone
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phones
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beinning
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beginning
at below 20%,
but
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it keeps
rise
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slowly,
then
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started to grow
significanitly
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significantly
in the late 90s and reached
its
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their
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peak about two-thirds in the end. In 1996, the
used
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of
CD
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the CD
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player
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players
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was at 60% and it kept
it
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apply
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skyrocket
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skyrocketing
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till
its
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it
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reached above 80%.
While
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access to the internet started late in 1998 and it was used in humble numbers but its
grow
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dramatically
double
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doubled
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it's
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its
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percentage in
short
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a short
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time and almost 45% of the UK locals
have
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had
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access to the internet
in
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at
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the beginning of millennia.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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