Some people acknowledge that technology and science have helped human civilisation reach the pinnacle of living. Others contend that technology and science can have negative effects. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In recent years
science
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and
technology
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have increased in
its
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popularity and they
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assist
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humans in various
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aspects.
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, many individuals state that
science
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and
technology
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helped in
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the urbanisation
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of
human
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humans
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,
while
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other
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others
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belief
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that they have
determental
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detrimental
results.
This
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essay will discuss both views and elaborate
why
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on why
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science
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and
technology
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played an essential role in societies' developments.
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with, one of
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the best
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way
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that
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and
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assist people
in
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is by helping
governments
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to deliver
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accessible services.
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, during
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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pandemic many
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could not help their citizens in order to avoid the spread of the infection through physical interactions.
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,
counties
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countries
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who
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that
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have great
sientiest
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scientist
in
for example
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information
technology
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help his
governments
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in creating websites through it many
inhibatants
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inhabitants
reach
to
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authorities
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authorities'
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offices
with out
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without
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visiting their real location.
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,
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and
technology
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were
indesbinsible
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indefensible
for highly developed countries.
On the other hand
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, the negative impact
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of
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overuse
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the overuse
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of
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and
science
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can be the vanish of traditional crafting
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jobs
, and many people would seek academic
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, and that will lead to
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a high
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unemployment rate. That means
,
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pupils will not be happy
for
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following ancient traditional
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jobs
and always looking for
higher
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a higher
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degree
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even though its reliability to
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a
jop
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job
is
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sceptical
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.
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,
science
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and
technology
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have an effect on employment status and rate. In conclusion, I
totaly
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totally
agree
with
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apply
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that
science
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and
technology
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help in human civilisation through
most
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the most
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challenging period and they play a pivotal role in keeping humans in touch with their
governments
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. they
also
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have some negative impact
in
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on
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jop
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job
availablity
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availability
and the presence of old
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traditional job
tradional
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traditional
jops
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jobs

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grammar
Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistency in verb tense (e.g., 'science and technology have increased' instead of 'has increased').
content
Clarify points and structure arguments more effectively; some ideas lack clarity and can be elaborated further.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary; some words are repeated (e.g., 'jop' should be 'job', and 'assess' should be 'assist').
coherence and cohesion
Work on sentence structure and variety to enhance the flow of ideas.
task achievement
The essay addresses both views and attempts to provide a personal opinion, showing an understanding of the task requirement.
task achievement
Use of examples, like the COVID-19 pandemic, effectively shows the relevance of technology in real-world situations.

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