Some people believe that protecting the environment is the government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Some
people
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believe that protecting the
environment
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is the
government
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's responsibility,
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others think that every individual should play a role in keeping it safe.
This
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essay will discuss both views before sharing my own opinion. On one hand, many argue that the
government
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should take care of the
environment
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because
people
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pays
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taxes, which are often quite high. With
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money, the
government
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can make rules to control pollution and waste and make
people
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pay if they go against the law.
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, in Singapore, there are strict fines for littering, which has helped make it one of the
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cleanest countries in the world.
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,
cities
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in cities
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like New York where the laws aren't as
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strict
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many
people
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face
problem
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problems
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such
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as spraying on walls, lettering and more which makes the city dirtier and affects the
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of the
overall
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city.
On the other hand
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, some believe that individuals
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have a responsibility to protect the
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. Small daily actions,
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as using less plastic, recycling, and saving water, can make a big difference.
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can
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join clean-up events and plant trees in their communities. In many places, groups of volunteers
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action to keep their surroundings clean, showing that individuals can help just as much as the
government
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. If everyone contributes, it will reduce pollution and create a healthier living space for all. In my
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both the
government
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and the
citizen
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citizens
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should help each other to keep the country safe. The
government
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should enforce some
law
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laws
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to increase recycling,
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and reducing
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reducing
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plastic.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that every sentence contributes to a clear argument; make sure all ideas flow logically from one to the next.
task achievement
Provide a bit more detail for your opinions in the conclusion, explaining why collaboration is important.
language accuracy
Check for grammatical accuracy, especially subject-verb agreement and plural forms; 'people pays' should be 'people pay'.
task response
You have clearly stated your opinion and provided a balanced discussion of both views.
task achievement
The use of specific examples, like Singapore and New York, adds strength to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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