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The first chart shows the percentage of water used for six products in 2004.The second chart illustrates the percentage of total income from products in 2004

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The presented pie charts compare data about the proportion of
water
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 that 6 various agricultural products used and the money that they generated in 2004.
Overall
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, it was important that dandelion and fruits were the best ones that the number of
income
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 per
water
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 was the lowest.
Moreover
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, fruits had the highest
income
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 among others in 2004.
According to
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 the diagrams, Fruits, the main farm production that had the highest cost, composed 28% of
water
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 and just under 40% of their
income
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. Vegetables, the best ones that need maximum
water
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, constituted 46% of
income
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 and just over 30% of
water
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. Cereal made up the same portion at 12% for both sections. The graphs demonstrate that Limon and Dandelion formed the same fraction in their
income
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 at 8% but for
water
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, Lime was similar to
water
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;
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, another one composed 3%, the same percentage as rice. Rice made up 1% of
income
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.

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