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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You are going to take a short holiday and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are right to the tourist information office in your letter explain what you need say when you plan to be there ask for information about prices

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into separate paragraphs for better clarity. A paragraph for your experience, one for your request, and another for the details you need would be beneficial.
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Make sure to clearly state the specifics of your request - such as the dates you plan to visit and the type of accommodation you are looking for.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear greeting and closing. You could write something like 'Dear [Recipient's Name]' and close with a phrase such as 'Kind regards' or 'Sincerely'.
task achievement
You described your previous experience at the resort vividly, making your letter engaging.
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Your enthusiasm for the location shines through, showcasing your passion for your holiday destination.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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