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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart represents how most
people
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 in the USA took
fat
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food
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 from restaurants between the years of 2003 and 2013.
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, the bar chart illustrated
the
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that
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 fast
food
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 was
taking
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taken
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 from the
restaurans
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restaurant
restaurants
 several
time
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times
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of
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apply
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a
week
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, once a
week
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, twice a month, and
few
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a few
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 times
of
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apply
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the
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a
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 year was increased throughout
the
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apply
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time,
while
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 the.
People
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those
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apply
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who ate their fast
food
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 several
time
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times
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of
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apply
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the
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a
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week
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 increased from 15% to 20%,
moreover
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to
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apply
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members who try it once a
week
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 was
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a litle
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litle
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little
 bit across to 33% after it was 31%, not just only that, the chart
outline
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 increasing in the percentage during a month between 2003 and 2013 from 30% to 34%,
then
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 witnessed a
rised
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rise
rose
 to
people
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 who tried it once a
week
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 about 15% after it was 12% in 2003.
People
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 who used fast
food
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 in their daily life witnessed a decline in percentage from 4% in 2003 to 2% in 2013,
furthermore
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, the
catergories
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categories
 of never
it
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apply
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decreased from 5% of
people
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 to 4%
of
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in
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 2013 in
USA
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the USA
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. either there is a move upward and drops between the percentage of the public in 2006, but it didn't
required
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require
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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