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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The provided charts give information about the number of people who visited Ashdown Museum a year before and after its refurbishment and the pie chart is based on the opinions of visitors.
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 point of view, it can be observed that the total number of inspectors increased.
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, the satisfaction rates rose by a great amount.
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 with, it can be seen that after the museum was renewed, the number of people rose by around 8000 (from 74000 to 92000).
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 was followed by a huge boost in individuals who felt very satisfied after inspecting the place, which went up to more than double.
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, the ratio of people who disliked the museum dropped significantly to less than one-third of its original value (40%).
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, the amount of very dissatisfied visitors halved over the period , going from 10 to 5 per cent.
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, the same ratio of 5%, had no reply for the review.

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