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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the amount of non-permanent asylum seekers working in four countries; Australia, New Zealand,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 in the
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year
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years
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 2003 and 2006 and
also
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 their
number
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 per 1000
people
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 in the
year
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 2006. There is a general increase in the
number
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 of immigrants in all the countries in the two years of study. New Zealand recorded the lowest numbers of migrants compared to the three other countries
,
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 but had the highest migrant per 1000
people
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 in 2006 at 21.1. United States had the highest
number
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 of settlers in both years
while
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 recording the lowest
number
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 in the per 1000
people
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 rate, followed by
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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 at 4.4.
United
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The United
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Kingdom
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 had the second largest
number
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 of asylum seekers in the
year
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 2006 at 266,000 and Australia
Coming
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Came
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 third with 219,000
people
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,
while
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the
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in the
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year
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 2003 Australia was the second most migrated region and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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coming
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came
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 third. In
conclusion
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 the table shows an upward trend
on
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in
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 the numbers of migrants all through the four regions.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom, year, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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