In many cities there is little control on the design and the construction of new homes and office building, people can build houses in their own style . What are the advantages and disadvantges of this situation ?

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no firm regulations for
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to build homes and offices.
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tend to build their own places based on their creativity.
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the benefits and drawbacks of the issues.
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with, for current regulations in some
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no firm regulations to control
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to build houses and office buildings. On the one hand,
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situation can help
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to create the construction based on their creativity and imagination.
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unique houses or buildings more
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can be attracted.
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other benefits,
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in tourism.
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from other places

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The introduction could be clearer if you restate the question to provide a strong foundation for your argument. Also, ensure that the grammar is correct. For example, 'many cities has no firm regulations' should be 'many cities have no firm regulations.'
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You need to develop your main points further. Providing more detailed examples would support your ideas and strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your essay has clear transitions between the advantages and disadvantages. This will help improve coherence and guide the reader more effectively through your arguments.
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The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages, which is a key requirement for this type of task.
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The writer attempts to engage with a relevant and interesting topic that has real-world implications.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Architectural diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Personal taste
  • Economic boost
  • Tourists
  • Architects
  • Investors
  • Enhanced functionality
  • Uniformity
  • Cityscape
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Safety standards
  • Potential hazards
  • Property value
  • Future buyers
  • Environmental impact
  • Waste management
  • Energy efficiency norms
  • Green building practices
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