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Band 5.5

A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear Sanath, How are you? Hope you are doing well after your illness. I heard the other day when your parents called my mother that you were admitted to a school in the city council. I know it's really hard for you to blend in with new friends but it would be better if you
tend
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tended
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 to communicate frequently with your
class mates
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classmates
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, share your things and thoughts
such
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 as books and novels you read and play or watch movies together
in
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at
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 the weekend.
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, it would be interesting for you to join a few clubs and societies in the school as well. As an example,
adventure
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an adventure
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 club which
takes
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 you on hikes and biking events,
reading
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a reading
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 club which
helps
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 you to find new people with similar interests and the sports club will be a place where you meet
sportsman
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 with different levels of abilities and capacities.
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, I would suggest you
to
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continue your path where you excelled in boxing.
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 would
defenietly
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definitely
 grow their interest in your ability and most of them including all the teachers and students will be able to identify you as an important person in the college. Hope you
would
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 be
make
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 more companions very soon. Take care. Deeshan

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more clearly into distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph could focus on a specific suggestion which would enhance clarity.
task achievement
Watch out for minor spelling mistakes like 'defenietly' which can affect the overall perception of your writing.
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You provided practical and thoughtful suggestions for making friends, such as joining clubs and engaging in activities.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and supportive, which is appropriate for the context of advising a friend.
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