You study at a college in the city centre. You use public transport to get to the college but the bus service you use has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In the letter, -Say who you are and the details of service you use -Explain the problem with the bus service -Suggest what you think the manager should do

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Hi , my name is Hala and I am a student at the college in the city
center
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, I've always used the bus to
to
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get to
collage
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college
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and it has been great and I want to
thnak
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thank
you for your
couaprtion
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cooperation
with us students . But
latlly
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lately
it
have
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been
defuclte
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defecate
for me to
countne
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continue
count
using
the
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public transport
beacuse
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because
its
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keep
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break
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down
counstlly
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country
and I'm getting late
to
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my classes . I hope you find a way to fix it or I suggest
to buy
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a
know
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new
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busess
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business
if it can't be fixed , I could help
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the budget and see how much it would cost since I study finance , or I could gather the student who
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effected
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affected
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by
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problem and see if you want any help by organize the
paper work
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we could do it and leave
th
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the
budget for you to decide . Thank you for your
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couaprtion
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cooperation

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grammar and vocabulary
Recheck spelling errors such as 'collage' instead of 'college,' 'course' instead of 'couaprtion,' and 'difficult' instead of 'defuclte'. Also, restructure some sentences for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly develops one idea. Consider separating your suggestions into their own paragraph for better clarity.
writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is very appropriate for this context.
task response
You provided personal details and examples which help support your request effectively.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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