The graph below shows the consumption of three kinds of spreads between 1981 and 2007

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The charts illustrated the usage of three different pastes which were

margarines

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margarine

kinds of margarine

portions of margarine

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, low fat & reduced spreads, and butter, from 1981 to 2007 in

grams

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Overall

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, the consumption of margarine and butter

were

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was

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nosedive,

while

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low fat and reduced spreads usage

were

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apply

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increased rapidly from its initial start. The usage of margarine

were

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was

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approximately 90

grams

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in 1981, only increased by 10

grams

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by 1996 before

plummeted

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plummeting

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to its lowest record in 2007 which was 40

grams

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Furthermore

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, butter consumption

also

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raised

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rose

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slightly

about

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by about

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grams

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from 1981 to 1986 and plunged by 90

grams

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to its stroke stat in 2007. Meanwhile low fat and reduced spreads intake boosted to its highest consumption in 2021 approximately from 10

grams

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to 90

grams

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. But it

narrwoly

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narrowly

down by about 20

grams

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between 2001 to 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

134 words

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The graph below shows the consumption of three kinds of spreads between 1981 and 2007

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