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Many countries raise fuel prices to deal successfully with problems of traffic and polluon. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution ?

Due to
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 the increase
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 pollution and
traffic
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traffic,
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 so many countries tended to implement higher prices on
fuel
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 ,
this
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 may lead to reduce the number of cars which are using
fuel
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 as a prime factor to move .
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, governments could impose high
amount
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 of taxes on
fuel
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, and raise
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awareness among
people
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.
To begin
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 with, by using high prices of
fuel
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 method, it can help
people
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with switching
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 to electric automobiles which
they
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are less detrimental to the environment.
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,
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implementing incentives
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 as comfort public transportation will encourage
people
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 to use them. In
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way
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 air pollution and road congestion are going to be less than before.
Other thing
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 that should be taken into consideration
that
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 officials could impose higher taxes to tackle those problems or to just
lessens
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 their impacts.
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, spreading
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awareness among
people
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 of the bad effects of the released gasses from the
fuel
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.
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, governments could distribute leaflets that
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 instructions
of
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 how to tackle
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propblem
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problem
 and how they should
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 responsible for their actions.
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, in order to address traffic and pollution problems that are detrimental to our planet,
people
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 all over the world must cooperate by using eco-friendly vehicles
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 and being aware of the consequences to have a better life.

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task achievement
Clarify the specific effects of raising fuel prices on traffic and pollution in your introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your paragraphs have clear topic sentences that guide the reader through your points.
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Expand on examples of how taxes or awareness campaigns could be implemented effectively.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and presents insightful arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and encourages cooperative action among people.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel efficiency
  • hybrid vehicles
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • emissions
  • inflation
  • economic impact
  • remote work
  • flexible hours
  • infrastructure
  • non-polluting
  • congestion charges
  • carpooling
  • commute
  • carbon footprint
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