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The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate how many British learners could speak other foreign languages
as well as
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 English in the UK between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, Spanish
saw
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 the most common option in which students opted for
language
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 over the ten years
while
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 German and two other
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language
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languages
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 had the lowest proportion in 2000.
In addition
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, the number of students who speak German remained stable in both 2000 and 2010. First of all, two
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language
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 fell in rate when researched in 2010 compared to 2000. No other
language
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 steadily dropped by 10%, having a 10% share in 2010. In 2000, French accounted for 15% of the total as shown chart,
on the other hand
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 in 2010
this
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 tongue witnessed a moderate decrease and had only 10%
spoken
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of spoken
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 pupils. From
pie
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the pie
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 charts, it can be seen that the Spanish
language
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 represented a massive 30
percent
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per cent
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 of the total in 2000 and rose to 35% percentage which still had
highest
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the highest
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students
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number of students
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. Another
language
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 and two other
languages
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language
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 groups showed a similar minimally increasing just by 5% in 2010 when the figures demonstrated 15% and 20%, respectively.
Furthermore
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,
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the Germany
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Germany
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German
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language
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 interestingly stayed static
with
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at
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 10% ten years after 2000.

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