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The rising levels of traffic congestion in many big cities around the world can cause the decline in the quality of life in cities. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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The question of whether the increase
of
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traffic
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jam
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 has
special
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a special
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affect
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to
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on
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 life quality in town is
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a wide
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wide spread
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widespread
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 debate among people. The accurate
residental
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residential
 plan and
car
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 taxes are considered
good
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a good
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solution
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solutions
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for
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to
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traffic
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the traffic
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 problem which is
due to
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count
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the count
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 of cars and
assembling
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 of
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population
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the population
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 to
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city
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the city
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center
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 for different reasons. There are several essential points related to
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 problem.
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, the soaring
of
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population
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 increases the demand
of
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for
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 transportation. In its report, The
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Comitte
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Committee
 of
United
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the United
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 State
America
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of America
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 wrote that the world
population
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 increased
50
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by 50
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% in
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last
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the last
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 80 years. Notably, the main portion of it
is belong
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 to the
city
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 residents reaching 80
percentage
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 of all increase.
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, it
also
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play
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 a role in changes
of
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in
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traffic
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 congestion
rate
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rates
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 over the years. Based on
same
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 report, there was only a
car
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 for each
city
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 resident in 1950,
however
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, recent statistics show that
,
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this
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 figure doubled over 70 years. Related to that, the work and school hours create great
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such
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apply
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problems. Parents hurry to reach
to
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school for their children and come back to work. With that, the
city
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turn
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 to hustle and bustle Governments and residents can take some measures
for adjusting
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to adjust
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 the
traffic
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 jam.
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, the main solution method is
spreading
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the spreading
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 of residents which gives an opportunity to live in different
area
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areas
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 related to their occupation.
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, being out of university can be a support which draws their students to
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city
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the city
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sides
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side
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. And some types of facilities can be out from
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city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 as a
solving
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solution
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. The workers can
also
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 spread over the countries
as well as
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example
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examples
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 of students. The second method is
car
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 taxes. It was designed for
avoding
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avoiding
 people from individual cars. Notably,
this
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 practical step is implemented by some countries and
keep
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keeps
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 the number of
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car
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cars
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 in the country.
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, the major problem
in
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with
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traffic
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the traffic
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 rate is related to
unuseful
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the unuseful
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city
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 or town plan and the soaring
of
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apply
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city
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population
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 which does not follow the correlation compared to
number
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a number
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 of people
live
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living
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 in
village
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the village
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. I would certainly use the tax and fee for driving individual cars or correction of current cities'
residentual
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residential
 plan

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coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring your paragraphs more clearly. Each paragraph should ideally focus on a single main idea and provide ample support for that idea. Consider using topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main point.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly address both parts of the prompt in your introduction to provide a comprehensive overview of your essay. Ensure that your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.
lexical resource
Use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance clarity and engage your reader. Consider using more precise language to express your ideas.
task achievement
You have identified relevant causes and solutions to traffic congestion, which shows an understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
There is a clear effort to connect population increase with traffic problems, showing a logical line of reasoning.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • traffic congestion
  • quality of life
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • bottleneck
  • commuting
  • alternative transport options
  • cycling paths
  • sustainable transport
  • reliance on cars
  • urban planning
  • vehicle ownership
  • population growth
  • inefficient layouts
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