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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate data about various
aim
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 of using water in some regions around the world.
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, it
clearer
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 that Agricultural
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 is
the
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dominant in 4 areas
such
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 as in Central
Asia
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. In
addiction
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 to
Indusrtial
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Industrial
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 is popular only in 2 places like Europe.
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, Domestic
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 is less useful in all of
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chart
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charts
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, but South America
use
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 it in large quantities. Looking at the information in more detail, we can notice that 3 regions which have more than 80%.
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, Central
Asia
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the
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superior in
Agriculrutal
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Agricultural
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88
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%.
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,
Europe
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in Europe
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that
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upper-level
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 in Industrial
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 is  53%, and Domestic
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 is the most useful
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% in South America. Central
Asia
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 has the
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 5% in Industrial
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 including the lowest percentage in the chart.
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, Agricultural
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 is the inferior 32% in Europe, but Industrial
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 is
highest-level
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.
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,
Cental
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Central
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Asia
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 with South East
Asia
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are
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 lowest-rank 7% in Domestic
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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