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Writing Samples
Band 2

nowadays many people move to large city centers what causes this? what are solutions

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In recent years, the number of people who migrate to larger urban centres has increased significantly primarily
due to
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 a lack of job opportunities in rural areas and poor living standards.
Although
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 the issue of relocation remains a significant conundrum, I firmly believe that
this
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 problem can be effectively addressed by implementing panaceas
such
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 as creating new job opportunities and building facilities in rural areas.
This
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 essay will discuss both the reasons and solutions for
this
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 phenomenon.

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task achievement
Ensure that each point made in the essay is sufficiently developed with specific examples or explanations to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, enhancing coherence.
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The introduction clearly states the topic and the author's viewpoint, setting a clear direction for the essay.
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The essay presents relevant reasons and solutions, demonstrating understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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