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Your have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter •say which points in the article you agree with •explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers. •offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article.

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Dear sir, I have just finished reading your article i agree with some points you mentioned. First of
all
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i
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 agree
on
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with
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 the houses and
the buildings part
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the part of the building
the part of the buildings
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, it
dose
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does
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 really have some
of
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apply
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the similarity
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similarity
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similarities
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 to each other and that I believe
go
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 by the historical story behind every city , and
scendly
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secondly
 the shopping mall
also
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look
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 the same . But the things that
i
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 would have to disagree with you
is
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about is
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 the coffee shops here are different from the others , here it more own
quite
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quiet
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 and peaceful you can read a book and enjoy the weather and
also
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 the rent here is
a
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quite good actually , it's affordable for families, each city
have
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it's
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 own price and for me and my
family
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family,
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 we like it much better here. I would absolutlay love to show you the differences each place
of
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in
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 the cities
have
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, and especially the food at
the
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Tim's restaurant Best regards, Hala Abdullah

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greeting and closing
Make sure to start your letter with a proper salutation such as 'Dear Sir,' and end with a closing like 'Sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully.'
coherence
Use more complex sentence structures and connect your ideas more smoothly to enhance coherence. For instance, try to use transition words such as 'however' and 'moreover.'
task response
Instead of stating 'I agree on the houses and the buildings part,' you might say 'I agree that the houses and buildings tend to be similar in many places.' This enhances clarity and precision.
task response
You expressed your opinion clearly and offered to give a guided tour, which is a great way to engage with the reader.
task response
Your idea about the coffee shops being peaceful and affordable adds a personal touch to your response, which is effective.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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