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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature.
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The map shows the current and the future development plan for Islip town
centre
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, there are major changes that will happen for the development, mainly
on
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 the north, where the shops and countryside will be developed into a more diverse complex and the main
road
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 will be built to connect the city.
Firstly
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, for the development, the current north part consists of shops and countryside with a main
road
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 dividing the shopping
area
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 will be transformed into a more diverse
area
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that is
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 pedestrian friendly. The shops will be centralized into a new shopping
centre
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, there will be a bus station west of the shopping
centre
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, a car park, and a new housing
area
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 northeast of Islip. There is a plan to upgrade the main
road
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 from a straight path to a circular
road
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 that covers all the
area
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 in Islip.
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 to that, the
road
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 itself will
be functioned
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into
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 a dual carriageway that connects the whole town
centre
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.
Finally
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, the housing
area
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 located
on
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 the south will be
further
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 developed by creating new housing
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 the southeast by taking some land from the park. The school will go through a minor change in the building.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, road, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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