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Some people believe that all companies’ decisions should be decided by managers, while others think that it is better to include employees in decision making. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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There is no doubt that these days
companies
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decisions
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 have been playing a significant role in a work environment. Some people argue that
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managers
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 should be decided a companies
decisions
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. Others believe should be included
an
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employees
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decision
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.In
this
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views and draw my own conclusions.
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managers
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be taken
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decision
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 in a
company
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. To explain,
managers
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an
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all
data
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the data
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 about
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company
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the company
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 and the
manager
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 work is making a
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 which
see
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 back
a
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benefit for
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company
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. so the first
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 should be taken by
managers
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not
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employees
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, in all
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company
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companies
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decision
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which
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made by
managers
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around
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 95% and 5% by
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, the
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decision
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 by a head.
On the other hand
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, some people think should be shared
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 to make
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. To clarify, these have a negative effect
such
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reduce
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 income.
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 that some
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workers
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 make
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own
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their own
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self benefit
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,
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does
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 not care about
company
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 benefits. As
result
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 that
make
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creates
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 a kind of conflict to
take
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make
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a
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decisions
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decisions
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 among
employees
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, in all companies in the world, the basic
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decision
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make
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are made
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 by
managers
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
managers
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company
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decisions
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. The lack of income is
a
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one demerit of sharing
employees
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decision
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.

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task achievement
Clarify your opinions and positions more clearly in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your ideas; ensure that each paragraph has a clear main point.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures and language to enhance the clarity of your ideas.
task achievement
You have attempted to address both sides of the argument, which is a positive aspect of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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