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The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data indicate the
overall
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income
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 of the police department in an area of Britain and the spending of the department in 2017 and 2018. In terms of
income
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, there
were
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 no significant difference between
two
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the two
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 years except local taxes, in 2017, local tax
income
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 was 91.2
million
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,
while
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 a year later
this
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income
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increase
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 to 102.3
million
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.
Additionally
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, 75% of the total
income
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spent
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 on salaries of staff and officers in 2017,
however
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, it diminished by 6%, and
this
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 amount reallocated to technology. The police department's total budget had only changed 13.9
million
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 in a year. Even though the biggest difference comes from local taxes, there were small
increase
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increases
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 in other aspects as well.
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, national government
income
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raised
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rose
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 to 177.8
million
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 from 175.5
million
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,
moreover
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, other sources,
such
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 as grants, soared by 0.5% to 38.5
million
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.
According to
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 what is shown in the pie chart, buildings and transport expenditures did not
changed
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change
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 at all in two years.
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, technology spending surged 6%
,
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 and reached 14% of total distribution.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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