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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
amount
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 of electricity which was generated in
Germany
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 and
France
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 in 2009. Units are measured in billion kWh and percentages.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the leading type of power was conventional thermal in
Germany
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 and nuclear in
France
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, meanwhile in the second place was renewables in both countries. Concerning different kinds of renewable
energy
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, the dominant one was hydroelectric in
France
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 but in
Germany
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 prevalent were biomass and wind. Notably, nobody produced
energy
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 from geothermal
sources
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.
To begin
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 with, the
amount
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 of power produced by
Germany
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 accounted for 560 billion kWh compared to 510 billion kWh in
France
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.
Besides
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, the proportion of conventional thermal
sources
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 constituted 56,6 % in
Germany
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 and 10,3% in
France
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. At the same time, the
amount
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 of
energy
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 made from nuclear
sources
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 was 23,0 % and 76,0% in
Germany
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 and
France
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, respectively. The figures that showed the
amount
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 of power generated from renewables made up 17,4% in
Germany
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 and 13,7 in
France
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.
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, it can be seen that the proportions of distinguished types of renewable
energy
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 were biomass 39,3%, wind 36,9%, hydroelectric 17,7% and solar 6,1% in
Germany
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. With regard to
France
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, the figures amounted to hydroelectric 80,5 % , wind 10,5%, biomass 8,1 % and solar 0,9%. Curiously, electricity generation from geothermal
sources
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 was 0,0% in both countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, germany, france, energy, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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