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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the comparison of salaries of different
professions
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professionals
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 working in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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.
Furthermore
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, the table gives information on the
hours
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 spent per week by these people.
Overall
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, the graph shows
steady
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a steady
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 for
increament
Correct your spelling
increment
 in the salary of professionals after
a
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apply
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three years.
In addition
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,
underground
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the underground
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 driver earns more than other professions,
comaratively
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comparatively
 working
less
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fewer
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hours
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. The income of
line
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a line
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 of work with similar working when started was between 30,000 and 40,000 euros which increased significantly.
On the other hand
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, police and
nurse
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nurses
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 are underpaid with 40 and 38
hours
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 per week, respectively.
Whereas
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, with underground driver is
payed
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paid
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 more than 50,000 euro for 36
hours
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 per week. To summarize the returns for highly qualified professions are less than
under skilled
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under-skilled
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 workers with more working
hours
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average salary
  • working hours
  • profession
  • data analysis
  • correspond
  • correlation
  • comparison
  • high-paying jobs
  • work-life balance
  • job market
  • qualifications
  • responsibilities
  • demand
  • summary
  • trends
  • implications
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