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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the provided graph reveals how much oil is consumed by four main countries including the US, China, Western Europe Japan ,and the
Middle
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 East between 2009 and 2030.
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, the chart indicates that there is a gradual rise in the
Middle
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 East and China.
However
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, you can witness a considerable decline in the use of oil in Western Europe Japan ,and the
Middle
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 East. looking at the details, regarding the
Middle
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 East, it starts at under 2
million
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of
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barrels in 2009,
then
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 surges gradually to 3
million
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 in 2030. If we look at the number of barrels related to China, it begins at approximately 2
million
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 in 2009, and after
that
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 the trend grows to around 4
million
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 in 2030. regarding the number of people who consume oil in Western Europe and Japan, the trend starts at about 4
million
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 in 2009, after that there is a significant fall of 2
million
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 in 2030. With respect to the consumption in the US, having levelled off at 10
million
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 for 6 years, the use
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 went down by 4 sharply in 2030.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words middle, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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