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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph
reprents
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represents
 the comparison of daily oil consumption in four areas, namely
US
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, Western Europe and Japan, China and
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Middle
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 East between 2009 and 2030 In general, it can be clearly seen that there is an upward trend in
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 East,
whereas
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 the rest witnesses the downward trends over the given period. As for
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Middle
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 East, the starting point was the lowest at 2
million
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 in 2009. In the next years, it climbed up gradually and is forecasted at 3
million
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 in 2030.
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, China has the same data
with
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Middle
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 East at the
begining
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beginning
 but it will experience a slight decrease from 2026 after reaching a peak at 3
miliion
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million
 in 2027. Oil consumers in
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the US
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was
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 five times higher than
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Middle
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 East and China,
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also
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which also
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 took the first place
of
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on
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 the list from 2009 to 2015. A significant fall
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 followed since
then
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 and will be at 4
million
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at the end
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 of the period. Western Europe and Japan
plumented
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plummeted
implemented
 by 2
million
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 in
21-year
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a 21-year
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 period and will stand at 2.1
million
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 by 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words middle, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil consumption
  • major consumers
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • trajectory
  • economic growth
  • energy policies
  • fluctuations
  • energy sources
  • technology
  • forecasts
  • data
  • patterns
  • comparisons
  • summarize
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