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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar charts
details
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 the proportion of
househols
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households
 with
internent
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internet
access
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 in Germany,
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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 and Spain from 2007 to 2019. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective , it is readily apparent that
access
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 to the internet in the 3 countries
increase
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increases
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 with time. Spain
was
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had
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lowest
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the lowest
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access
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 to
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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,
while
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 the highest
between
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among
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 the 3 countries was Germany . Spain
starting
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started
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 in 2007 with 40%
that
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which
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 climbed with time to
reach
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apply
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double the percentage in 2019 . On
other
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the other
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 hand UK
starting
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started
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with
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at
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 60%
than
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then
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 increased by time 10% to peak up 90%
on
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from
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 2013
till
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to
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 2017 and
in
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at
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 the end of the period
become
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became
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 almost 100%. Germany was the highest among all
the
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three
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 3 countries from 2007 untile 2019, from 70 % climbed up to
peak
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a peak
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90
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of 90
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%
on
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from
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 2013
till
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to
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 2017 . In 2019 the proportion of
internent
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internet
access
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 was almost 100% which is
parellel
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parallel
 to
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words access with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Household internet access
  • Percentage (%)
  • European countries
  • Twelve-year period
  • Technological advancement
  • Digital connectivity
  • Yearly/periodic growth
  • Significant increase
  • Government initiatives
  • Technological breakthroughs
  • Rapid growth
  • Policy changes
  • Infrastructure development
  • Economic factors
  • Plateaus
  • Saturation points
  • Societal impacts
  • Economic impacts
  • Remote work
  • Digital commerce
  • Future projections
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