IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The pie chart below shows the revenue from five industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarise information by selecting and reporting their main features, and make comparisons were relevant

The pie chart below shows the revenue from five industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarise information by selecting and reporting their main features, and make comparisons were relevant
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The data demonstrates the average income by city in the UK.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is notable that there is a huge economic gap between
Londond
Correct your spelling
London
 citizens and the other English and Scottish ones. It is
also
Linking Words
 noticeable that the number of
pople
Correct your spelling
people
 isn't related to earnings. Looking in closer detail at the chart, it can be observed that people living in London, Cambridge, Bristol and Edinburgh, have the highest average revenue. In fact, it accounts for 33,634 £; 29,854£; 27,828£ and 27,592£, respectively.
Hence
Linking Words
,London which is the most populated conurbation, features the wealthiest people by far. Cambridge, despite the fact that it is
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 less populated city, presents the second most valuable income. With regard to the other figures, Manchester, though the second most populated city with 4643 citizens, has
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the lowest average income which accounts for approximately 26,000 £,
smilarily
Correct your spelling
similar
 to Glasgow.
Finally
Linking Words
, Birmingham highlights the lower average
salaray
Correct your spelling
salary
 per capita, accounting for 25,531£.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: