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The chart show the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year and the line shows the average rainfall. summarize key information andmake comparison where relavent.

The chart show the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year and the line shows the average rainfall. summarize key information andmake comparison where relavent.
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The bar graph illustrates the average
rainfall
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 by month for
last
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 year in
Australia
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, and the line graph depicts the average
rainfall
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 for the 40
last
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 years.
Overall
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, the average
rainfall
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 for
Australia
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 experienced several fluctuations over the year,
while
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 the
avarage
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average
rainfall
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 of
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last
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the last
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 40 years in
Australia
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 experienced a decrease followed by an increase. In January, the
rainfall
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 was around 70
mm
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, and it declined to 60
mm
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 in February followed by a slight increase in March
and
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apply
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that
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which
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 was 65
mm
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. In the next month, April, the average
rainfall
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 experienced a dramatic decline and approximately 20
mm
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rainfall
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of rainfall
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 occurred in
Australia
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.
In contrast
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, from May, the number rose to around 40
mm
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,
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 and again started to decrease gradually. In August, the
rainfall
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 reached below 10
mm
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. In November, the
rainfall
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 experienced another rise and reached below 40
mm
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 in December. The average
rainfall
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 in January was roughly 80
mm
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 in January, and the figure experienced a rapid drop and in April, it reached above 20
mm
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.
Furthermore
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, the number experienced another gradual decline, and in October, it reached around 18
mm
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.
However
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, it started to rise again and
recahed
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reached
 approximately 60
mm
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 in December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, australia, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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