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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of the high education

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Nowadays, It is necessary to include free of
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community
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services
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 school curriculum in my opinion
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 will have a positive impact on the upbringing and personality of young people. In
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 I will look into
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 of the importance of
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community
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services
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 for teenagers. First of all unpaid
community
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services
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 encourage and motivate high school students to be more active in school affairs.
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 they learn how modern society functions and become aware of its system.
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result
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 they are likely to become active citizens in the future.
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 many promenade figures and public leaders
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 that public service played a significant role. Another important aspect of involving children in
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 work is that they realize the value of volunteering by participating.
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, it seriously affects their care and worldview
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 can lead to the fact that they develop not only material assets in life
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 important qualities
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 free society
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useful
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 for youngsters personally and professionally. Through
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works
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their
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evolve
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 communication, leadership and teamwork skills.
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 abilities are appreciated by employers.
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 projects increase practical skills.
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 of medical students in health projects helps to strengthen their knowledge and increase their confidence.
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, unpaid
community
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services
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 should be a compulsory part of tertiary because
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nurtures
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 responsible citizens,
equips
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 students with valuable life skills and
befits
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 society as a whole.

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Grammar
Improve grammar and punctuation in your introduction and throughout the essay. For example, 'free of churge' should be 'free of charge', and be mindful of run-on sentences.
Coherence
Develop clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance the logical flow. Presenting the main idea at the beginning of paragraphs can guide the reader more effectively.
Task Achievement
Use more specific examples and details to support your points. For instance, expand on how community service directly influences personal development or provides valuable experiences.
Content
You have a clear stance on the topic and present several relevant points supporting your argument.
Structure
Your essay structure is generally sound, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • social responsibility
  • personal development
  • professional development
  • hands-on experience
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • problem-solving
  • practical application
  • civic engagement
  • social issues
  • networking
  • internships
  • job opportunities
  • valuable references
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