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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Mobile phone subscriptions

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Mobile phone subscriptions
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The line graph
proived informations
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provided information
 and
compire
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compare
 between
subscriptions
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 to mobile and fixed
phone
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 lines in 4 countries between 2005 and 2015. It is clear from all graphs over
the
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apply
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time
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 all
countires
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countries
 were changed in
subscriptions
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in
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of
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 all types. Mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
were stadly
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apply
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improved in 2005 was about 100
then
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were
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apply
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rose to 130 in 2015. United Kingdom
were ues
Verb problem
,
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 the fixed
phone
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 by
highly
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high
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 number
subscriptionsof
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of subscriptionsof
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 over
the
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apply
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ime
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time
 but in 2015 was
decrese
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decreased
 slatily
abot
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about
 10.
while
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,
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apply
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Eritrea
pepole
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people
were
Verb problem
had
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lowest
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the lowest
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 number of Mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 and fixed
phone
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 lines in all years . In
India
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India,
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the
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apply
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Mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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were
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apply
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graduly
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gradually
 rose over
the
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apply
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time
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 to
rached aroun
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reach around
 100 in 2015 .
Linking Words
However
Add a comma
However,
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 the fixed
line
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lines
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waren't
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weren't
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 sa
phone
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line
Fix the agreement mistake
lines
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 were
decrese
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decrease
decreased
 over
the
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apply
show examples
time
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.
Wilhle
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Wille
, Uruguay
ramakbly
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remarkably
 rose in Mobile
phone
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 subscription over
th
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the
time
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 to 150

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subscriptions, phone, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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