Some people think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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. Some portion of people believe that the best

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is taken by Childcare centers,

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others

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that,

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I shall conclude my opinion. On the one hand, if you want to be a

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for a child,

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need to obtain a certification for that role. Having said that, it is justified that workers at nursery school are highly trained for that position.

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, they have advanced knowledge

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experience to provide

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to develop their personalities.

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infants are at

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, they can encounter moments with other kids, and they can have fun.

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, Children can play various games and have

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each other

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, a subscription to

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place is not pocket-friendly. Parents need to pay

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hourly amount to the caregiver for looking after toddlers in their absence. On the other side,

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their own grandkids

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and can treat them with extra

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, gramps often feel lonely after their retirement.

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, they tend to feel better with their grandson or granddaughter.

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granpa

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grandpa

and granma can provide

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nutritious food to the babies. Undoubtedly, it will be helpful to foster a bond of family between

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and grandkids.

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, it can be said professional caretakers are skilled enough for their role in the exchange of money, and

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grandmother

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trustworthy for that position,

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familiarity

. In my opinion, I would let

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take

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of the babies.

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Task achievement

Consider refining your introduction for clarity and grammar. For instance, you could rephrase it as 'There is an ongoing debate regarding the best type of care for preschool-aged children. While some believe that childcare centers offer the best services, others prefer care from family members like grandparents.'

Coherence and cohesion

Try to improve the logical flow of your ideas. For example, make sure each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea of that paragraph.

Task achievement

Expand your examples to provide more depth. Instead of mentioning that children can play games at daycare, discuss specific activities or benefits of socialization with peers.

Content

You provide a balanced discussion of both viewpoints, addressing the pros and cons of each option.

Content

Your conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion and reflects on the points made in the essay.

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Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

282 words

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