Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subject like Sciences and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that
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the educational curriculum should mainly focus on teaching history
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think
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essential,
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especially
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in these days, students should be taught how to deal with the current technological development and discover more about the
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scientific
subjects. In my own
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of view, I believe that science is important for children
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history.
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, knowing
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ancient civilisation may enhance our world.
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, in the past people used some tools or methods in the agricultural and
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irrigation systems in order to produce their food, even if the land was not good enough for growing crops, nowadays we can use their methods to have a great amount of food.
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, many countries are still protecting their monuments for tourists and having
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good amount of information about it can change your way of thinking.
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, the pyramids in
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Egypt
and how the Pharaohs manage to build it is still a mystery,
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watching the sight and knowing more about
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may force you to think
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On the other hand
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technology is being developed day by day pupils should learn how to deal with it. Companies are searching for the kind of employee
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is capable
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a computer without the need to be taught.
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, the job market needs specific
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of majors and to have the ability to study them
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requires
require
a
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scientific
degree.
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, biology is needed in the medical field
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chemistry,
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physics and math
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more important for engineering and computer stuff. In
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conclusion
, students are divided into
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groups,
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those
who
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to know more about
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ancient
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are saying
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that history is important,
whereas
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others would
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prefer
to learn more about using the computer. In my opinion, I think that both
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is
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essential
for pupils.

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grammar
Focus on proper grammar and spelling across your essay to improve clarity and professionalism (e.g., 'whether,' 'especially,' 'scientific').
structure
Clarify your arguments by ensuring each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details that are logically connected.
language
Use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance the richness of your writing and maintain the reader's interest.
content
You present both views on the topic clearly, which is essential for task achievement.
examples
You provide some specific examples to support your points, such as the pyramids in Egypt and the relevance of biology and chemistry in the medical field, which strengthens your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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