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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the
number
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 of
minutes
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 ( in billions) of telephone
call
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calls
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 in the UK,
devided
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divided
into local - fixed line calls, national and international - fixed calls, and mobile ( all calls) spanning 7 years between 1995 and 2002.
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, Local-
fixed line
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call
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calls
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 fluctuated throughout the period,
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, national and international fixed-line calls steadily increased,
while
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 mobile calls surged significantly. Despite these trends, the total
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 of
minutes
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 of UK telephone calls rose from 1995 to 2002.
Time
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 for domestic calls was about 70
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 and steadily increased until 90
billion
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minutes
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 in 1999,
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, in 2000,
this
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number
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 began to decrease, dropping to around 85
billion
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minutes
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 in 2000, and
then
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 to approximately 70
billion
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minutes
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 by 2002. The
time
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 for national and international calls started just under 40
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minutes
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 in 1995 and steadily increased every year over that period of
time
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 and reached just above 60
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minutes
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 in 2002. The
time
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 for mobile calls was under 10
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minutes
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 in 1995 and gradually rose to just above 10
billion
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minutes
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 in 1999. After 1999, the
number
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 of mobile
call
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calls
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 skyrocketed, reaching approximately 40
billion
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minutes
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 by 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, time, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phones
  • local calls
  • national and international calls
  • billion
  • minutes
  • growth
  • decrease
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • overtake
  • peak
  • plummet
  • steady
  • significant
  • minor
  • chart
  • period
  • comparison
  • category
  • data
  • illustrate
  • reveal
  • indicate
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