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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph below provides the percentage of the global
population
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 in
four
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 different
countries
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 from 1950 to 2002, and
also
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 the future amount for 2050. There are
four
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countries
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:
India
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,
China
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, the United States, and
Japan
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. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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,
China
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 had the highest
population
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 in 1950 with about 22.5 per
cent
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, followed by
India
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 with an actual 15 per
cent
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, the USA with 7 per
cent
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, and
Japan
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 only with
approximate
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 3 per
cent
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, respectively. In 2002, three out of
four
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countries
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,
China
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, America, and
Japan
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, had dropped in the percentage of the total world
population
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.
On the other hand
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,
India
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 was the only country that increased from 15 per
cent
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 to about 17 per
cent
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. For 2050,
China
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 and
Japan
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 will continuously drop significantly
while
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 the number of America's
population
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 will constant from 2002 to 2050.
In contrast
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,
India
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's
population
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 will rise to almost 20 per
cent
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, and become the most populated country. In conclusion,
India
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 has an upward trend in the percentage of the global
population
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 and is projected to rank first among the
four
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countries
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 in 2050
whereas
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China
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, the United States of America, and
Japan
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 have
a
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downward trend for over 100 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, four, countries, india, china, japan, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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