The bar chart below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a second year Graphic Design course at a college in the south of England. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The bar chart below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a second year Graphic Design course at a college in the south of England. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a second year Graphic Design course at a college in the south of England. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
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This
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bar chart depicts, the number of abroad students enrolled in a second-year Graphic Design course in the South of England college. It is clear from the graph that the enrolled acceptance from five various regions France, Germany, Sweden, Spain and Syria. It is
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the
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Syrian females have more than males in both courses.
According to
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what is shown, the students from Sweden represent the largest number
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Syria are lower.
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, the males enrolled in Computer Aided Design subject are less than females.
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, the total number of enrollment to Photography subjects in males is more than
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female
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females
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.
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, from all
countries
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there are women registered for Photography
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except Syria.
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, the admission from both countries France and Germany are approximately the same. In conclusion, we could say that, can observe the enrollment from five different countries.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • overseas students
  • enrolled
  • Graphic Design course
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant
  • minor changes
  • enrollment
  • popular
  • diverse nationalities
  • academic year
  • compared to
  • dominate
  • in contrast
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • visual representation
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