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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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annually
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production
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 of milk in four various regions Netherlands,
Australia
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, Tanzania and Guatemala in 1990, 2000 and 2010. It is clear from the graph that all the nations illustrate increasing in the
perioud
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period
 time except
the
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apply
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Australia
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.
According to
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 what is shown,
to
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beginning with
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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this
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 country
produce
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produces
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 above (11,150,000),
while
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Australia
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in Australia
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 the amount of
the
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apply
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production
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are
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is
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 slightly
decline
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declining
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.
In
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other
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the other
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hands
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hand
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, the
countries
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country
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 which are
representing
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swiftly climbing is Tanzania was increased by more than 50,000 until 2000,
by
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and by
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 2010 the
incresment
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increase
 slowly is around 10,000.
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,
Guatemala
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in Guatemala
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 in 1990 the total
of
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production
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 was (26,000 Lites) by the next twenty years that
increasing
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increased
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 by triple. In conclusion, we could say that
,
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 the highest region
represent
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representing
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 the total amount of
rising
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 is Guatemala
while
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,
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 there is only one region
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is shows
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drop
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the
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in the
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 summation of
production
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 namely
Australia
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. In 2000 there
is
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are
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 two countries
decresing
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decreasing
 above 100,000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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