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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The maps provide key information about the
village
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 of Ryemouth in 1995 and its evolution in the present.
Overall
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, it is clear from the maps that the
village
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 of Ryemouth has undergone a significant development.
In addition
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, farmland was removed to make a way for
a
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apply
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golf and tennis courts,
whereas
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 a hotel and a cafe
were remained
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remained
have remained
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 unchanged.
According to
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 what is shown in
1995
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the 1995
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 layout, the farmland was located
on
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in
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 the northeast of the
village
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. The hotel and the cafe lie in the south of the
village
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 beside the sea
while
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a
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apply
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housing units
were
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apply
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lie in the northwestern of the
village
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. A group of shops and fish markets were positioned opposite the sea. In terms of the present plan, the group of shops and fish markets were replaced by
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and apartments. The farmland was redeveloped into the golf and tennis courts. the housing units were expanded to accommodate more residents.
However
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, the hotel and cafe
were stayed
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stayed
have stayed
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 unchanged.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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