Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

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around the world and were stealing or taking

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rich countries are stealing

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coherence and cohesion

Improve the overall structure by clearly separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each body paragraph should focus on a single main idea.

task achievement

Include more relevant examples to support your arguments, enhancing the clarity and relevance of your ideas.

coherence and cohesion

Revise for grammar and vocabulary to improve clarity. This includes more precise word choices and correcting spelling errors.

task achievement

You express personal beliefs, which adds a unique perspective to your essay.

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You provide an interesting analogy about footballers, which helps illustrate your point about skills and opportunities.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
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take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

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Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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