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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: explain why you are writing express concern about the missing card ask them what they intend to do

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Dear Sir or Madam. I was looking forward to
get
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getting
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 my new car and
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finally
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finally,
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 I
received
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received it
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. But when I took out everything from the envelope there was not a
card
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.
Thus
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, I was surprised, that you missed the
card
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. I was with my family members when I opened the envelope and they can agree. I regard, some of your staff from the bank who
is
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responssible
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responsible
to manage
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for managing
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 all like
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this things
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this thing
these things
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 missed and did not put the
card
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,
However
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 here is one issue, from
left
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the left
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 side the envelope was split and the car could
be
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have
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 slipped from the convert. So I
cant
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can't
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 wait to get my credit
card
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, Because I have
businesses
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business
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 and need to
has
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have
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 it after tomorrow. I am going to come
myself
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apply
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in
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to
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 the bank and hand in the credit
card
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. If I have to pay extra to get the
card
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 after tomorrow, I will pay, it is not
problem
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a problem
the problem
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. Just I want
to
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the to
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card
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must
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apply
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be
prepeared
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prepared
 after tomorrow. Your Sincerely.

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language
Make sure to check the spelling and grammar. For instance, 'car' should be 'card' and 'responssible' should be 'responsible'.
structure
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs: one for the introduction, one for expressing concerns, and one for your requests. This will enhance readability.
tone
Use a more formal tone and polite phrasing, such as 'I would appreciate it if you could' instead of 'I cant wait to get my credit card'.
content
You clearly stated your issue and provided details regarding the missing card and your situation, which shows a good understanding of the task requirements.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • acknowledge receipt
  • compromised security
  • unauthorized transactions
  • identity theft
  • reissue
  • secure (the account)
  • fraudulent activity
  • account holder
  • security measures
  • customer service
  • follow-up
  • discrepancy
  • escalate the issue
  • trace the delivery
  • account security
  • financial risk
  • confidential
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