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Band 3.5

You have seen an advertisement from a couple who live in Australia looking for someone to teach their two children, your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter: Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job Say what else you could do for the family Give you a reason reasons for wanting the job

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Dear Sir, I am
witing
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writing
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this
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 letter in
regards
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regard
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 to the
advertisment
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advertisement
of
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for
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 teaching a second language to your child. I am studying nursing at the moment and
it
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I
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 will finish
in
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apply
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the next month. As I am looking to continue my master's degree abroad and
National
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the National
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university
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University
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 of Australia is my target, it is suitable for me to gain experience in working with kids.
This
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 could be helpful for me to
adopt
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adapt
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 myself
with
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to
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new
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the new
a new
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 situation in your country and become
independant
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independent
 after a year. More to add, Persian is my native language and it is possible for me to teach it without any problem.
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, I will be a
part time
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part-time
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 student and could help you with daily tasks
such
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 as
do
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apply
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shopping for
house
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a house
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. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 I could get
this
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 vacancy. Thank you for your
valueable
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valuable
 time. Kind regards,
AHT
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ART

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language
Make sure to proofread your letter for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'witing' instead of 'writing' and 'valueable' instead of 'valuable.'
structure
Ensure that each paragraph focuses more clearly on a single idea to enhance clarity. For example, separate the mention of your qualifications and your situation in Australia from the additional help you can provide.
content
Your intention to gain experience while studying is a good reason for wanting the job and adds depth to your application.
content
The inclusion of your native language is relevant and important, making your suitability clear.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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