The bar chart gives information about the proportion of children, men and women eating fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart gives information about the proportion of children, men and women eating fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.
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The chart illustrates the average daily fruit and vegetable consumption of
men
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, women and youngsters. At first glance,
it is clear that
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,
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women have been gaining the highest percentage every year. Even though
men
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and children have not reached that level, they have
also
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shown an increasing trend over 5 years. The main reason why females eat more fruit
,
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is because they spend most of their time in the kitchen and
also
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they care about their health more than males. In the first year of research, the proportion of women was almost two times that of kids and during the next 5 years, it continued rising,
while
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,
men
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's and kids' consumption remained constant until 2003. The
female's
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female
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proportion reached the high of 35
percent
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per cent
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then
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showed a little decreasing tendency up to 30. Turning to the
men
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's and children's rates, the eating scale of the kids depends on their mothers, males are
also
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very lazy to peel vegetables to eat.
Therefore
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, they showed almost the same trend for
this
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period.
However
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, between 2006 and 2007 the
men
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's rate stood at around 27,
while
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the graph shows the sensible increase in the young generation's proportion at that time.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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