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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1999 & 2004) Coffee UK Switzerland Denmark Belgium Sweden 1999 (millions of euros) 1.5 3 1.8 1 0.8 2004 (millions of euros) 20 6 2 1.7 1 Bananas Switzerland UK Belgium Sweden Denmark 1999 (millions of euros) 15 1 0.6 1.8 2 2004 (millions of euros) 47 5.5 4 1 0.9

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1999 & 2004) Coffee UK Switzerland Denmark Belgium Sweden 1999 (millions of euros) 1.5 3 1.8 1 0.8 2004 (millions of euros) 20 6 2 1.7 1 Bananas Switzerland UK Belgium Sweden Denmark 1999 (millions of euros) 15 1 0.6 1.8 2 2004 (millions of euros) 47 5.5 4 1 0.9
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The tables compare sales of
fairtrade-labelled
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coffee
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 and bananas in two years in five
dfferent
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different
 countries; the UK,
Switzerland
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, Denmark etc. The units are in millions of
euros
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.
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,
it is clear that
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 the biggest
coffee
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 sale altogether was made in the UK in 2004, even though
Switzerland
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 sold the most in 1999.
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 latter country
also
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 saw
the
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major deals from bananas in both years.
To begin
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, looking at the trading of
coffee
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 in detail, in 1999, about 3
million
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euros
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 of
coffee
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 was sold in
Switzerland
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.
This
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 was a massive gain compared to other countries
in
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this
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 year.
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,
UK
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the UK
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 made the most substantial deal in 2004, about 20
million
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euros
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,
while
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 Sweden got 1
million
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euros
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 which was the least.
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, considering
banana
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the banana
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 business in these places,
Switzerland
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 acquired 15
million
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euros
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 and 47
million
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euros
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 from bananas in 1999 and in 2004 respectively.
This
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 country made the highest sales during the period given.
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, a transaction of only 0.6
million
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euros
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 was done in
Begium
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Belgium
 in 1999, which was generally the lowest, so long as
banana
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the banana
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 trade was concerned, whilst Denmark acquired the least in 2004, about 0.9
million
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euros
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, switzerland, euros, million with synonyms.
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